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[annique]

Sailor

Sad sailor sailing south
Singing so sad songs
Shouts sounding sorrows
So cemented into his soul

Sudenly stops at the sight of sand
Silently stands staring and stunned
At the steep steps to the sky
He's slit his wrists and spoken a goodbye

 

[FuneralCry]

Thank you for sharing. It is very well written.

 

[Dead Meat]

Very nice I Loved it, you have a talent for writing

 

[annique]

Very nice I Loved it, you have a talent for writing

thank you very much for such a kind comment!

 

[Nemeshisu]

It's great poetry. You're quite talented writer. May i ask why did you use so many words with the letter 's' in them? Or did you do it for no apparent reason?

 

[SwissCheese]

I really like it! You should be proud of yourself!

 

[london3]

Sailor

Sad sailor sailing south
Singing so sad songs
Shouts sounding sorrows
So cemented into his soul

Sudenly stops at the sight of sand
Silently stands staring and stunned
At the steep steps to the sky
He's slit his wrists and spoken a goodbye

Really amazing writing, you do have a talent

 

[Rational man]

Beautiful❤

 

[annique]

It's great poetry. You're quite talented writer. May i ask why did you use so many words with the letter 's' in them? Or did you do it for no apparent reason?

thank you!! I personally like the sound of s's. It sounds like someone is sighing out of tiredness or sadness, so I tried to convey those feelings by using words with the letter s.

I really like it! You should be proud of yourself!

Really amazing writing, you do have a talent

thank you!!!

 

[Nemeshisu]

thank you!! I personally like the sound of s's. It sounds like someone is sighing out of tiredness or sadness, so I tried to convey those feelings by using words with the letter s.

Personally, i think you did convey those emotions very well. Thank you for answering my question.

 

[rationaltake]

This poem is a skillful blend of emotion and meaning. You have a perfect ear for language. You're a master poet.

 

[annique]

This poem is a skillful blend of emotion and meaning. You have a perfect ear for language. You're a master poet.

You have no idea how much I smiled while reading this comment. For me, writing is the means by which I easen the pressure that my feelings cause inside of my mind and heart. Thank you so much, kind soul

 

[rationaltake]

You have no idea how much I smiled while reading this comment. For me, writing is the means by which I easen the pressure that my feelings cause inside of my mind and heart. Thank you so much, kind soul

You touched my soul with this poem. ❤

 

[toasterbath]

ALLITERATION LEGEND So talented

 

[annique]

ALLITERATION LEGEND So talented

thank you!!!! you're the kindness legend

 

[Nirrend]

That's beautiful and deep <3, I'll keep reading them if you make more !

 

[annique]

That's beautiful and deep <3, I'll keep reading them if you make more !

 

[yıη]

This is lovely Annique. I love the flow. Even "cemented" fits because of the "Sss" sound. It's very unique. I also really like the letter S. If pronounced properly... it gives words a strange power. I thank you for giving me the chance to see this.