Venting Would anyone give me some feedback on my songs?

[skyburials1984]

I've been working on an album, and I'd like to hear people's thoughts before I ctb...

 

[Rogue Proxy]

Could you please include the song's lyrics?

 

[skyburials1984]

Take it off
This skin of a thousand sighs
I wandered down an avenue
Just to fumble in the very very darkened world
Bodies like the stomach of summer
Gold trend to starve and longing soul
I walked by the fountain by the house where we grew up
Where you and I
I fucked up
& you felt doomed and me
We were children back in 2003

Maria
In my dreams it seems as if you're drawing in
Maria

Oh oh oh oh
Maria

It was fun while it lasted
But now it's over in the sun but settled down
Just lay my bones on the old mound
Beneath the riverbed & I'm about to see you round
I'm alone and in control
I'd lay in the grass for days and days

I burned through
90 years of love
Those 8 days of equinox
The solstice came and went
& washed right over us
Enamel bones
Its inside turned to dust

Maria
In my dreams it seems as if you're drawing in
Maria

 

[EyeWish...]

I quite like the music in your song, very enjoyable. I also knew a Maria, I wasn't close to her or anything but I do miss her beautiful voice. I hope you find peace soon

 

[skyburials1984]

I quite like the music in your song, very enjoyable. I also knew a Maria, I wasn't close to her or anything but I do miss her beautiful voice. I hope you find peace soon

Thanks so much... My suicidality is why I named my group after a Tibetan funeral method. I'm sure I will find peace soon, they don't offer that method of disposal in the UK though, haha.

 

[EyeWish...]

When are you gonna release the album? I'd like to check it out. I'm quite the avid music listener.

 

[skyburials1984]

When are you gonna release the album? I'd like to check it out. I'm quite the avid music listener.

This summer, when I've finished everything for the project, on all streaming platforms.

 

[Hardcore_Henry]

Im no music critic, but i can say i really like this.


no joke, Im gonna add this to my playlist.

 

[Arachno]

It's not really the type of music that I listen to often but I like it! It's a nice listen.