My poem about suicide

[Archness]

I'm a bit of a writter, I like writting.
I don't do it that often, as I wonder "What's the point?".

However, I came upon some inspiration and wrote this today.
I hope it's good, and worthy of being posted here.

It's quite dark and about my considerations for ctb.
But I think it's abit thought-provoking.


The Divine Light :
By Archness.

Reaching reaching,
past this world,
past my self,
into heaven above.

There's no god in this world,
yet a divine light inside me.

Yet I can't find the source,
can't know the reason,
yet the soul's set alight with my heart beating.

This divinity,
this consciousness to ascend itself,
to feel past my body and mind,
why was it given to me, of all?

Why do all humans contain this gift?

To ascend ourselves,
past the universe,
yet chained to our very existence here.



Reaching reaching,
past all,
for what?

Is there a heaven up there?
For it's beyond this world.

This world where the only way out is death.



I reach still,
I wish to fly and soar,
yet I can't.

My soul's companion, the flesh that encases it.
My guide the blood in my veins.

I'm bound to myself,
seeking further then my legs can take me.

Why do I have this light,
without a god from whence it came?



This world becoming heaven on earth,
a temple for flesh,
with many pleasure machines.

Still I'm unsatisfied,
yet the flesh is content.

I ask, what the difference between this best world to be,
and the heaven in the world of death?



I'd already be dead in that world,
till I cease forevermore.
Yet it is a perfect world that'd come,
yet I'd still be reaching,
and waiting till death comes.



Shall I explore the land of the dead?
Explore what's past this veil?

But I know what's really there,
my everything knows,
oblivion.
The forefit of this light.



To do that,
It'd be a better state then what I am,
What I could be.
This light's already been wasted.


So I ask myself,
Shall it be put out?

 

[AJwantsToGo]

Creating art is a powerful coping mechanism, it works for me at least. Keep up the writing, I like what I see. Any poets you take inspiration from?

 

[OutOfTheVoid]

this is so good omg, everything abt it resonates with me so much. i relate on such a deep level that your poem sounds like something i'd write (im a writer too). are we the same person haha

 

[FuneralCry]

Thank you for sharing, it's much appreciated.

 

[SilentSadness]

It's a very good poem, I am dumb so I find it difficult to understand a lot of the meaning but it is still very deep and thoughtful. You should make more.

 

[Archness]

I'm glad you guys like this.

i relate on such a deep level that your poem sounds like something i'd write (im a writer too)

You're a writer too? Can you share some of that with me?

Any poets you take inspiration from?

Not really, I'm not well-read or anything. Other then some things from English class, and perhaps ddlc, I haven't read any poems like this. Who would you suggest?

 

[OutOfTheVoid]

You're a writer too? Can you share some of that with me?

sure! can i dm you?

 

[Archness]

sure! can i dm you?

Oh yeah!

 

[mistake22]

Really cool poem! I'm not much of a reader but I definitely enjoyed it.

 

[MasochistFemboy]

Why do I have this light,
without a god from whence it came?

I love it

 

[Ultracheese]

Wow! This is so beautiful You're an amazing writer with such a great grasp on imagery. I really loved the lines "This world becoming heaven on earth, a temple for flesh, with many pleasure machines." The contrast between the idea of heaven we create for ourselves and what we have here on Earth is really interesting and something I never thought of before. You portrayed it so well.

 

[Bocket]

I'm a bit of a writter, I like writting.
I don't do it that often, as I wonder "What's the point?".

However, I came upon some inspiration and wrote this today.
I hope it's good, and worthy of being posted here.

It's quite dark and about my considerations for ctb.
But I think it's abit thought-provoking.


The Divine Light :
By Archness.

Reaching reaching,
past this world,
past my self,
into heaven above.

There's no god in this world,
yet a divine light inside me.

Yet I can't find the source,
can't know the reason,
yet the soul's set alight with my heart beating.

This divinity,
this consciousness to ascend itself,
to feel past my body and mind,
why was it given to me, of all?

Why do all humans contain this gift?

To ascend ourselves,
past the universe,
yet chained to our very existence here.



Reaching reaching,
past all,
for what?

Is there a heaven up there?
For it's beyond this world.

This world where the only way out is death.



I reach still,
I wish to fly and soar,
yet I can't.

My soul's companion, the flesh that encases it.
My guide the blood in my veins.

I'm bound to myself,
seeking further then my legs can take me.

Why do I have this light,
without a god from whence it came?



This world becoming heaven on earth,
a temple for flesh,
with many pleasure machines.

Still I'm unsatisfied,
yet the flesh is content.

I ask, what the difference between this best world to be,
and the heaven in the world of death?



I'd already be dead in that world,
till I cease forevermore.
Yet it is a perfect world that'd come,
yet I'd still be reaching,
and waiting till death comes.



Shall I explore the land of the dead?
Explore what's past this veil?

But I know what's really there,
my everything knows,
oblivion.
The forefit of this light.



To do that,
It'd be a better state then what I am,
What I could be.
This light's already been wasted.


So I ask myself,
Shall it be put out?

It's wonderful, thank you for sharing it. If there's more of your writing that you'd like to share I'd be more than happy to see it. I always like seeing what other people write since it gives a small view of how they perceive things differently to me. I even found that writing down my thoughts has been a helpful tool to get through hard times.

 

[Archness]

It's wonderful, thank you for sharing it. If there's more of your writing that you'd like to share I'd be more than happy to see it. I always like seeing what other people write since it gives a small view of how they perceive things differently to me. I even found that writing down my thoughts has been a helpful tool to get through hard times.

Yeah I can share some, feel free to DM me.

I see you just joined the forums today, any reason for that?

 

[Bocket]

Yeah I can share some, feel free to DM me.

I see you just joined the forums today, any reason for that?

I've been a lurker for a big and only recently just made an account for the sake of finally actually talking to other on here.